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Thursday, May 3, 2012

Unsafe Game

Everybody knows
I broke the boy
played unsafe
with a gentle heart
He placed his faith
in a crooked game
conned by a
pretty mask
I need to repent
what I cannot fix
stop the forward motion
of the wreck of me
before the casualties mount
I want to turn away
from his stormy eyes
Don't want to see
the hurricane
my twisted love
brought forth
But if I don't face
the consequence
I'll just break
another boy
I'm tired of the chaos
tired of the mess
tired of the damage
I leave behind
So I seek the elusive
state of grace
to bring to life
a better version of me
where love is safe
and hearts are free
to take the crazy leap
for a hallelujah ending
instead of the fiery crash

In response to Poetry Jam, Sunday Scribblings, and One Single Impression.

11 comments:

  1. Very touching poem you've written here. It gives insight on the feelings on one side of a broken and ending relationship.

    My poet in a simple acrostic penned the beginning of a relationship for a man who had been avoiding those ties of affection.

    Jim's OSI

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  2. Very honest and soul-searching poem. I like its redeeming quality, wanting to find grace. Yes, there is hope still in love :)

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  3. I like the short lines in this and the feeling of stark honesty. Excellently done!

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  4. Beautifully honest, and that is a quality I really appreciate. I do think we are all seeking hallelujah endings, and I wish one for you. I am so glad you have found Poetry Jam.

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  5. Here is my link to the poem on "Everybody Knows."

    http://inthecornerofmyeye.blogspot.com/2012/05/everybody-knows.html

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  6. So I seek the elusive
    state of grace
    to bring to life
    a better version of me
    where love is safe
    and hearts are free


    This holds such a sweet honesty. This poem is very humbling. Thank you!

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  7. smiles....yeah i agree, i like the humility in this in realizing we are jacked up or where you jacked up...breaking the boy got my attention up front....nice take on the PJ prompt...

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  8. always better to have a good ending then end up like a dead evil kenivil

    the river

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  9. Very nice...I think we need to find our peace and safe haven, or else we will just continue to break more hearts

    My share: http://a-sweetlust.blogspot.ca/2012/05/everybody-knows.html

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